Poem I just wrote, what do you all think? What do interpret from it? Criticism welcome.?

Not bad. It is a beat send-up which has its merits - but there are more beats than Jack and Alan and you do yourself a disservice by not reading anthologies of that time. Libraries and used book stores are your best friend. Read deeply! Check out Ira Cohen or Ed Saunders or Ted Berrigan online. Check out Charles Henri Ford. This surreal-neo-beat scene still thrives. The second generation New York School poets spawned a handmade 'zine underground and I suggest you find your way into it. Online is only the tip of the iceberg. Poetry is best when you can fold it and stuff it into your pocket to read later on. Lastly, try and avoid trite and cute turns of phrase. They are below your ability. And drop every instance of "whilst" Elizabeth. This is the '90's!